Monday, April 19, 2010

The train and the platform - 55 fiction

So this is my first attempt at 55 fiction, which is a story within 55 words.


 The train and the platform

In the plush AC compartment, the infant cried out.
“There, there” said the mother, as she soothed it. The baby quieted down and fell asleep in its mother arms.
Outside, on the platform, the beggar woman's infant cried out.
“There, there” said the mother. The baby quieted down and fell asleep in its mother arms.

6 comments:

  1. Brilliant. Simply brilliant.

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  2. Wow....that was so simple and yet had so much meaning in it..
    Marvelous write!
    Keep them coming....

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  3. 55 has its own charm..well done

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  4. This sort of writing is also called flash fiction no? I loved it! I've generally loved every piece of flash fiction I've read. I could never do it because I write/talk too much. But I appreciate others who are able to write supershort stories :D

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  5. Thanks
    I don't know exactly what its called. I think its called 55 fiction, but I'm not sure.

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